Justyce Schilz Ms. Lehmann English 1-3 12 February 2019 My Lagoon Trip Every year, my family and I go to Lagoon. One year, something happened. Something nobody saw coming. My mom and dad told my brother and I that we could go on one more ride before we left. My brother wanted to go on The Rocket, but I wanted to go on The Old Roller-coaster. Any time I was strapped into the rocket, my heart felt like it was going to jump out of my chest. “We decided to go on The Rocket,” said Jake. “I did not agree to that,” I exclaimed. “Please! Nothing bad will happen,” Jake cried. I thought about what he said and came up with a plan. I was going to say that I would ride with them, but as soon as my parents got on The Rocket, I would leave and go to The Old Roller-coaster. I planned on going on The Old Roller-coaster because it was a short ride and I would be back before their ride ended. They wouldn’t even know I was gone. “Fine. We can go on the Rocket,” I told my mom. “Okay. Let’s go get in line,” she announced. My family and I walked across the park to go get in line for The Rocket. The Rocket was super tall, and was as white as the clouds on a sunny day. Its seats were the color of roses. As we were getting closer to the ride, my heart started pounding like the beat of a drum, even though I knew I wasn’t going to get on it. We stood in line for what felt like forever but had only really been twenty minutes. Once it was our turn to go on the ride, a loud, squeaky noise came over the speaker. “The next five people in line may enter The Rocket,” said the lady operating the ride. “You guys ready,” asked my mom. “Let’s go,” yelled Jake. I made sure that everyone else got strapped in so that when I left, they would already be stuck in the ride. I looked at the girl behind me and said, “You can go; I don’t like this ride anyway.” “Thank you,” said the girl. Once my family started the ride, I ran to The Old Roller-coaster as fast as I could. I felt like I was running as fast a cheetah. The only reason I went to that one was because there was a short line, and I knew I could finish before The Rocket ride was over. The roller coaster was fast and short with lots of twists and turns. The wood looked like it had been through many winters and was about to fall apart. I hopped in the empty seat and strapped myself in. The roller coaster started to take off, and I started screaming as loud as I could. Then, half way through the ride, the roller coaster kept going straight over the edge when it should have turned. The operator noticed and shut down the ride, but he was too late. The roller coaster went off the edge and there was no stopping it. The car kept going, and I closed my eyes, hoping that nothing bad was going to happen. As I was thinking that, the car started to turn sideways. I thought for sure I was going to die. The car hit the ground and shook. Once I felt us stop moving, I opened my eyes. People were running towards us. I was able to get out of the car, and someone was there to help me if I needed it. The only thing that had happened to me was a broken arm. Some people did not make it out alive, so I was very lucky. The one thing I did not want to happen had happened. My parents and brother found out. They were happy that I made it out alive, but my mom said that when I was better, I was in a lot of trouble. My family and I went home, and I was stuck in a cast for almost a year. I had to miss playing basketball for the year, which was sad because that was my favorite sport. I ended up getting grounded for not telling my mom or dad where I was going. They told me that the only reason I was grounded was because I did not tell them where I was and that something really bad could have happened to me. In conclusion, I learned that I should tell my parents where I am at all the time. I still have nightmares to this day about what happened. I am just so thankful that nothing terrible happened to me. After my broken arm healed, my friend asked me if I wanted to go to Lagoon with them. I said no because I will never be able to forget what happened there. I will always tell my parents where I am from now on.
Narrative Reflection Questions Answer all questions with complete, grammatically correct sentences. Be specific and thoroughly address each question.
List one thing you've learned from writing this paper that you can apply to other writing assignments. What will that look like? ~ I learned how to apply description into my story to give it more detail. In other papers it will look like a paper with better description.
Identify a specific revision you were asked to make and explain why (this can be at any stage of the writing process). How did you revise? What did you learn? ~I was asked to put a lot of comma's in certain spots. I put the commas where they needed to go. I learned where I should use commas.
What are the conventions of a narrative and how did you meet those in this assignment? ~The literary devices and I met some of the in the story by adding detail and description.
Given more time to work on this assignment, how would you improve it? ~ I would take more time to work on my grammar to make sure my story made sense.
What is one thing you're proud of in this paper? ~I am proud of the dialogue and description I used in this paper.